Hi Sofia, I really enjoyed reading your essay since your experience learning English is something I can relate to. I related to when you said walking into a room felt like everyone knew the rules except for you. I think your story is clear and I like how you wrote this like it is a journey you took on, especially the progression from you being comfortable with Spanish to later gaining confidence in English. To answer your concern, I think something you could improve on would be adding some more detail in important moments, like when you explain the interactions in the classroom, adding a specific moment would make it easier for the reader to connect with the experience. For your organization concern, I think it is clear and in order as to when events happened. Although, I think some ideas could feel a bit repetitive, like when you mention the English difficulties. I think combing those sentences could help with the flow. Overall I really enjoyed reading your essay and it shows great growth from you with literacy!